Wednesday, November 08, 2006

One cloudy night it was about six o’clock, and Amanda was in the black car. She was wit her friends Kevin, nick, and Alex. They were all on their way to watch Ryan’s football game. He was the wide receiver. Ryan was Amanda’s boyfriend and nick, Alex, and Kevin’s friend. The game was already two minutes into the first quarter. They all sat down hung out, talked and watch the game. The football game was now over and so they all waited for Ryan to come out of the locker room and got out and he went to give Amanda a hug and a kiss and said hey to everyone else. They all congratulated him on his two touchdowns he scored. He ran one in the end zone fiercely and caught one, he had an awesome game. Ryan’s team had won the game even though it was a very close score, 21 to 24.Amanda offered Nick, Ryan, Alexandra, and Kevin if they all want to go back to her house because her parents were out to dinner. So they all went back to her house. She herd a crashing sound in her house while she was opening her door. She and all her friends checked the house to make sure no one had been in or robbed her house so they searched her entire house. They didn’t anybody or anything in her house missing so she just said maybe it was just my dog. They all sat down talked about the game a little and talked about a bunch of different things. They suggested watching a scary movie so they decided to watch Saw III. Amanda just had bought the movie the other night so she went upstairs to go get it and Ryan followed her up. They got the movie and were about to walk down stairs until the phone rang. Amanda asked Ryan to check the caller ID to see who it was but it said no number. Amanda ignored the phone call. They got down stairs and the phone rang again, but this time it didn’t stop ringing. She answered the phone “hello?” but there was no answer .She said hello about three more times. The man had said, “Hello Amanda. How’s it going?” “Hi who is this?” she said. The man screamed, “Look outside your window and you will find out” but he had screamed it so fast she didn’t understand what he had said. The man had hung up by the time she could answer back. Ryan asked Amanda who that had been because she had a frightened look on her face. She told Ryan “I don’t know but come on let’s go downstairs and watch the movie.” Amanda put in the movie and made sure all the doors were locked and windows were covered and shut. As she was closing the last window she saw a white flash dart through her yard but she didn’t know what it was so she started getting scared. She walked over to the couch and sat down and the movie just begun. They herd a knock on the door so Amanda sighed and got up. She was going to open it she looked out the peep hole to see who it was but nobody was there. She looked and found a piece of paper sitting on the floor so she picked it up and opened it and read what it had said….. I was the one on the phone and I’m also the one in your house. Amanda dropped the letter and ran like a race horse and jumped on the couch and told them what had happened, what the letter had said, and they just looked at her like she was crazy. She said,”look ill show you. She reached into her pocket but nothing was there. She remembered she dropped the letter. She trotted back to go get the letter but it was gone. She went back to her friends.” it’s gone, but I’m not lying its really true I swear believe me.” They all just thought it was a joke, or she was trying to pull a prank on them. Amanda just said,” lets get back to the movie.” Ryan asked, “Where did Kevin, Nick, and Alex go? Amanda answered back, “I don’t know did they leave?” “Or maybe them man got them Amanda joked.” Ryan chuckled, “no I don’t think the man got them or I don’t know where they went.” Finally all three of them jumped out behind the table and scared the heck out of Amanda. She screeched and jumped higher then Michael Jordan ever could. But then started to laugh because she realized it was just her friends. It was too late to watch the movie now so Amanda told everyone that they could watch it tomorrow. Everyone gave each other hugs or slapped each other hands (the boys with the boys), and they all went home. Amanda got a phone call and it was the man Again he said, “Come in your room start looking for me in your house im still in here ok try finding me now!” Amanda walked up to her room very slowly with an enormous butcher’s knife in her right hand holding it up by her ear shaking badly. She got up to her room and seared it impatiently she had wished her friends were still with her. She went through her whole house she couldn’t find him so she thought it was just a prank or something. She sat down on her couch and relaxed for a minute then she felt someone breathing on her leg so she looked under the couch and then the man grabbed her leg. The two of them were wrestling and then she finally stabbed him with the knife and hit him in the head with a chair he was knocked out. She dragged him outside and called the cops to come get him. The cops arrived asked questions and Amanda had told them everything that had happened. She called her friends to come over and she would tell them everything that happened. She had blood all over her and tears running down her face like a waterfall. She looked down and realized she had been cut from the knife Kevin Nick and Alex had arrived at her house and took they took Amanda to the hospital and then they got home about two hours later .Her parents were home and we told them what had happened. As time went on it was about two years later and they were all at Amanda’s house. They were playing a game and then Amanda’s phone started to ring she didn’t check who it was and she put it on speaker phone cause they were in the middle of playing. And she answered, “Hello?” no answer so she looked at her friend’s with a weird stear and then an answer came hello Amanda .Amanda’s eyes grew very wide. And then the man said, “IM BACK!” In a long voice. Amanda dropped the phone and everyone started at each other with a scared puzzled face.
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1 comment:

ChristinaL said...

I almost think you could leave the very beginning out about the football game since you mention it, but then move on rather quickly. If it's not central to the story (and it doesn't appear to be) you can afford to cut some of the extra stuff out.