Monday, November 06, 2006

"OK. So finsih getting ready and come right over." demanded Zack while on the phone with Erica. "Shall do." replied Erica. They both hung up their phones. Zack trotted into the kitchen with his best friend, Jon, exicted about the halloween party, and also because all the people are seniors. Zack's pretty sure there will be fights and lots of them. Since the party will have to stay in a hotel over night.

When they walked into the hallway, they saw the front desk. Jo asked for a room for one night but all the rooms were taken. They all didn't know what to do so they stood there for a moment, when a creepy looking guy offered them three a room. Eric accepted because she knew that that room was the only place they could stay. The creepy guy walked the three young adults to their room, and than vanished down the long, empty hallways. As they all walked in to the room, Zack noticed that there was a funky smell in the room, byt Jon and Erica didnt notice. Zack went into the bathroom, and took a shower. When he stepped in to the steamy hot water, a guy came from behind the bathroom door and attacked him. He skinned Zack alive and chopped his head off. Erica and Jon were too busy checking out the room that they hadnt noticed Zack screaming in desperation.

Erica and Jon were both very curious as to where Zack could be. So Erica told JOn to look outside int he hallways while she went to look on the balcony. As Jon walked out the door, Erica turned around and went towards the balcony doors. She looked down and saw a rope on the ground. When she saw it, she bent down to touch it. Right when she did, a guy wearing all black attacked her. He put the rope around her neck and pushed her over the 2 story balcony railing. During this time, Jon was still looking in the hallways and is thinking that Zack is hiding. He looked under the bed and saw dismembered body part, including Zack's head with no eyeballs. Jon screams his head off, looks up, and tries to run out of the room. The guy that killed Zach and Erica is in a closet that Jon is passing, jumps out, and gets Jon. The killer makes Jon pass out for hours.

Hours later, Jon finally wakes up and finds himself laying on a bed, tied down. While trying to wiggle out, he notices that his stomach is cut open and his organs are surrounding him. Jon eventually finds his way out of the ropes, starts running for the door, but falls to the ground because the back of his ankles were sliced open and bleeding fluently. Luckily the door is cracked open enough so that Jon can see out the door but all he is able to see is the guy that offered him and his friends the room and the guy has three other kids with him. Jon's reaction was gasping and screaming, "No!" Unfortunately, it was too late because there was another killer in the room who had an ax in his hands and chopped Jon's head off and puts his dismembered body parts under the bed for more people to find.

3 comments:

BTB said...

I thought this story was very grusome and disgusting. Like in the last Paragraph when Jons Hikiles Tendence were cut so he couldnt walk. But i also found some spelling mistakes that i think you should fix before you turn it in.

J.R.S said...

I LIKE HOW YOU DESCRIBED HOW THE PEOPLE REACTED TO EACH OTHER.

Anonymous said...

awsome word choice and creates a grusome image in my head. i like it