My short story
As the clock pass midnight Jamie was watching TV, she fell asleep, she wakes up and get the feeling that someone is watching her so she gets out of her covers and turns the lights on and no one was there, she goes back to bed; the minute she goes back to bed, she hears a noice like Shhhh and y then her phone starts to beep it was a text message saying “I can see u” Jamie gets scared and decides to go look for her parents they weren’t home yet they were in a party; so Jamie decides to call her best friend Leah. Leah tells her that she should wait until morning.
Jamie’s phone starts to beep again it was another text message but this time it had no text it had a picture of her talking on the phone with Leah, when she looks up the guy from the text messages is there, he tells her his name. Jamie starts to scream and she runs to hide but luckily the police get home on time to catch the guy.
3 comments:
A little short for me, to be honest. (It sounds like "Scream.") I also feel as though you are talking, not writing.
Please slow down and take your time with the details--I really want to be scared!
it was a little to short and i think that it was scary but it needed more details and tell mre about what happened
i agree with all of them but u need to add more detail it does sound like a movie tho it is really good but u could elaborate a little more.
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